I think I cut this one just a little too close for comfort. As of Monday afternoon, I had no story and no ideas. So I picked a title which became my prompt. Here’s the product of my last-minute, mad dash to complete a story.
I hope you like it.
Summer Siren
Halia scowled as dark clouds gathered over her island home. It was summer, and she wanted to be on the cliffs, watching as beautiful men on their beautiful sailing vessels skirted the reefs that ran below the surface of the deep blue water. In her dreams a sailor with golden hair, ruddy skin, and deep blue eyes beckoned to her. He sang songs of the sea and told tales of distant lands.
Halia watched for him.
Longed for him.
She knew he would come to her. She knew.
Neso did not approve. The matters of men are their own affair. The love of men leads only to despair. The rhyme was her sister’s mantra. Halia didn’t care. She saw the ships and their sailors and she was drawn to them, certain that their journeys would take them to exotic destinations far away. She liked to imagine what it would be like to go on an adventure across the sea.
“Maybe,” she had mused to herself on more than one occasion, “my blue-eyed sailor might some day come share tales from across the water. Maybe I could go with him. Maybe he could love me.” Desire bordering on desperation filled her soul.
She knew it was an empty wish.
Still, she watched the waves.
This day, what she saw surprised her.
It was not a sailing ship large enough to carry cargoes of silks and spices and wine. It was a smaller boat, a mere skiff by the looks of it. Not a vessel fit to be traveling this far out to sea.
Halia ran along the strand of sandy soil to a rocky outcropping. From that vantage point she would be able to see the boat more clearly.
More importantly, anyone on the boat would be more likely to see her. With the wind beginning to whip, she knew the tumbled boulders of her shoreline would be all but invisible. A ship large enough for fifty men would easily be grounded on those rocks. This tiny boat could be smashed to kindling.
She climbed until she could haul herself onto a broad, flat ledge. The heat of the stone soaked into her bare skin in spite of the storm that now threatened. A wall of grey rain loomed in the distance.
And there it was. A tiny white boat bobbed between waves that revealed and hid it in turn.
On its deck a single man worked to control the bobbing vessel. She could see his golden hair and his ruddy skin. And despite the wind, she could hear a deep, baritone voice ringing out clear and piercing.
Come to me, my bonnie lass
Come across the sea
For though I sail ten thousand leagues
Ever I’ll return to thee, my love
Ever I’ll return to thee
She knew in her heart that, could she see his face, she would fall right into his deep blue eyes.
Her toes curled against warm granite as the rain began. “I’m coming, my love. You have found me!” Her heart leapt and Halia followed.
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“Halia? Halia!” Neso cried out for her sister as she picked her way along the rocky beach. Tears welled in her eyes as she chased a faint hope that her foolish sibling might have taken shelter in a grotto against the morning’s storm. She’d heard the song herself, so she knew. Her sister was lost forever.
Halia had answered the call of the siren.
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I hope you’ll take the time to read the other stories in this Hop. These are some great writers and wonderful people. And if you like what you read, I hope you’ll consider joining their lists too. The world is a richer place when there are more stories to tell.
Please note, if you find links that don’t work, try again later. Sometimes it takes a little time to get the gremlins worked out.
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- Summer Siren, by Elizabeth McCleary **YOU ARE HERE**
- The Birch Tree, by Juneta Key
- The Zoning Zone, by Vanessa Wells
- Secrets, by Elizabeth Winfield
- Team Building Exercise, by Samantha Bryant
- Another Time, by J. Q. Rose
- Suds and Sclaes, by Eileen Mueller
- Beginning Again, by Karen Lynn
- Under the Bridge, by Katharina Gerlach
- Black and White, by Bill Bush
Ooooohhhh, I love this. Now I wonder if she found what she was looking for
Thanks. 😀
Perfect. So original. I loved it.
Thank you. 🙂
I love a good twist. Nice work! @mirymom1 from
Balancing Act
It’s always fun to turn a common tale inside out.
Beautiful, but bittersweet tale. I guess I identify with the emotions of the sister losing the Halia. Should I feel glad for Halia and the sailor? Not sure. Well-told. Thank you.
I almost didn’t leave the sister in at the end; I think the story is complete without her. I guess she’s there just for you. 😀
I loved it. He was the siren. Great twist.
Thanks, Juneta!
You work well under pressure. Nice job!
Thanks, Bill. I try!
What a great twist on the “usual” siren story! Loved it!
I love this story.
Is she truly lost? Or has she found love beneath the waves?